betweensunandmoon: (PotC)
To save myself, Aria, and Naomi time and energy, I'm doing a report on Hope. The fic as a whole isn't bad enough to warrant a full-length sporking.

Report format shamelessly stolen from [ profile] heave_ho.

TITLE: Pirates of the Caribbean: Moonlight's Curse
CULPRIT: ArianaielNightstar
SUMMARY: COMPLETED. In this first installment of a series of 3, follow Hope Danforth, daughter of Port Royal's minister, on a journey that takes her to a future she never expected would happen. This is where the legacy of Hope Danforth began.
BEST LINE: "Gentlemen, maladies. You will always remember this as the day that you almost caught, Captain, Jack, Sparrow!" Jack said pushing Elizabeth into Norrington's waiting arms and almost toppling the others as Jack turned and hit a lever with his foot.

NAME: Hope Danforth
HAIR: Not described
EYES: Not described
OBNOXIOUS AND/OR IMPLAUSIBLE ORIGIN: Reverend William Danforth and his wife Isabelle.
OBNOXIOUS AND/OR IMPLAUSIBLE CANON CONNECTIONS/AFFILIATIONS: Is Elizabeth's BFF, later befriends Will and convinces him to teach her to sword fight. Gets engaged to Gillette, but ends up falling in love with Jack and breaking off the engagement.
TRAGIC PAST: Her older sister was killed by pirates.

THE "PLOT": We open up with Isabelle giving birth to Hope, after which she instructs the midwife to tell everyone she died in childbirth, then runs off and abandons her family for no adequately explained reason. Hope receives a point in her favor for not using her mother's supposed death as an excuse to angst. Fast-forward thirteen years. Hope meets Elizabeth. Norrington proposes to Hope's older sister Catherine. Pirates attack Port Royal and kill Catherine. Will meets Hope and agrees to give her fencing lessons. Gillette proposes to Hope. The rest of the fic is your basic rehash of the first movie with an OC tagging along.

NOTES: The fic is more mediocre than bad, but the author has no idea how to use commas or attribute dialogue. At all.

Hope understandably hates pirates because they killed her sister, but she gets over that hatred awfully quickly once she, Jack, and Elizabeth get marooned on the island.

Hope is a newborn when Isabelle leaves, thirteen when she meets Elizabeth, fourteen when Catherine dies, fifteen when she meets Will, seventeen when she asks Will to teach her to fence, nineteen when Gillette proposes, and twenty-one when the events of the movie happen. That's far too many timeskips for my liking.

We meet an obviously creepy bit character, who sexually assaults the Sue just so Gillette can come to the rescue. )

Jack and the Sue enact a clich´┐Ż. )

Jack confesses his love to the Sue. )
betweensunandmoon: (PotC)
In which Hope meets Will, convinces him to teach her to swordfight, and...well, you'll see.

Warning: Chapter Four contains sexual assault.


DISCLAIMER: I do not own anything POTC related.
NOTE: Sorry that last chapter was so sad and depressing. I thought it necessary to accentuate that part of Hope's life to help the flow of the rest of the prequel, with Jack Sparrow's entrance and her attitude towards him in the beginning.

Aria: Something about that scares me.


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betweensunandmoon: (PotC)
Good grief, that's a long title.

In honor of PotC 5 (which I still haven't seen yet), I'm sporking this fic. Or rather, I'm making my OCs Aria and Naomi spork this fic.

Hey, ladies. Remember Gethsemane Butler?
Aria: I try not to. What about her?
Her stories are long gone off of, but her profile's still there...and with it, her favorites list.
Naomi: Oh, boy.
Most of them are from fandoms I don't know, but there were two PotC fics and one Phantom fic. This was the shortest of the three. The Sue is fairly inoffensive, but the prose and grammar suck. Shall we?
Aria: You say that like we have a choice.
Naomi: *elbows Aria* Sure!


Chapter One )

Next Chapter: A Life Started & A Future Ended

Aria: How do you end a future?
Naomi: Wait, the lights aren't coming back on. Does this mean we have to do another chapter?
Aria: I guess.

Warning: This chapter contains a death.

Chapter Two )

Next Chapter: The Art of Love

Naomi: I smell Sue-romance.
Aria: So do I, but that's for next chapter.
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